Strangers on a Train Poem. Poetry. 4 short poems about love.
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A Vision on a Train.
Bored with the journey and looking out of the window at the towns,villages and fields.
I catch a glimpse of them,
Just in the moment as she raises her chin to look up at him.
A transformation, the light reflected.
He must be like an icon to her.
Her face is almost golden in the evening light
as she gazes up at him.
I can almost read the hopes and dreams written there
in the small creases at the corners of her eyes as she smiles.
I catch my breath, hoping all will be well for them.
Aware of how vunerable she is, how frail love is.
In her dreams she is walkng on air, powerless.
I hope that this iconic love is worthy of her.
I hope that if love fails he will set her down gently
Close to the place they both started from.
The train we almost missed.
We run for the train,
laughing as the suitcases bang against our legs
almost tripping us up.
We run away from the city grime,
the work day misery.
We jump onto the train for the coast.
We do not know if we have packed the right clothes
at our age you do not listen to the weather forecasts.
We are unaware of anyone else,
it is just us, a train journey and two suitcases.
Grounded.
I would have been on that train, leaving the city far behind me.
Heading for a dream, life on the coast, it would have been fun.
But they found the tickets, they grounded me. Now you will be waiting,
at the station, boy with no last name. I will never be able to find you.
You will think that I did not want to meet you. And when I am an old lady
I will wonder why I never asked you, what is your last name?
Waiting at the Station.
I am standing at the station,
but all hope is dying,
I am wondering now,
was it a silly game,
were you lying?
I have stood here till my feet are numb,
one train has gone
Two have arrived,
my heart is pounding,
The message of its tune
is you are dumb,
you little fool.
You broke the unwritten
trust no one rule.
I spent a fortune
to look this good.
People are staring,
I feel misunderstood.
OK,
I will wait for one more train,
I cannot go home,
alone and face
the inevitable pain.
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Copyright notice: The words here in the poems are mine and they may not be used without my permission - this applies to my photographs and images too.
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Thank you creative one - oddly I had not noticed the sadness in them. Yet when I read them now, I can see it there in places. I think I was focussing on different outcomes of similar events. Poetry for me is like that though, like peeling layers of an onion,sometimes it makes you cry. Thank you for taking the time to read these peoms and for leaving a comment.
Very beautiful 2useday! The train station is very visible with all hearts involved.
2uesday what a joy to read. Please write more poetry you have a wonderful fluent style. Thank you.
Oh gosh - D.A.L. thank you for saying that. I have been struggling not to write poetry but to write other things for so long. Yesterday I just 'threw in the towel' and wrote these one after another. In my mind I always thought that maybe my poetry was too naive in style, so I was trying to write about factual subjects. This type of creative writing and the short stories are what I enjoy writing most.
Hi Micky thank you - I spent a lot of time waiting for a train to arrive and communicating by letters, way back when. :)
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Hi I see you are featured on Twitter. I just stopped back because I didn't have time to comment yesterday when I read these. They are really nice. I really felt the pain in "Waiting at the Station". (((hugs))) Tammy
Hi Tammy thanks for letting me know - I do n't have a twitter account so had not seen it. Thank you. Pleased you liked these.
That was a very strong immediate poem - trying not to cry, being a man and all that. But loved it!
Kindest regards, Kev.
Thank you Kevin for leaving such an encouraging comment on this. It is always difficult for me to judge how well the poems will read to others, so the feed-back I have recieved on this poem has been really helpful.
I enjoyed reading them :)
2uesday thank you - you write with such a lyrical quality and there is light everywhere in your words just as there is a story which resonates inside anyone who reads them.
I really loved the theme you chose here - but most of all I love the way you write and the tenderness with which you sensitively reach out with your words - and touch another's heart. Thank you.
Thank you amorea13 - this series of poems began when I momentarily glimpsed the look on a young girls face as she looked up at her partner. It sparked thoughts and memories of the way railways stations and train journeys use to be.
I still find it hard to believe that my poetry is read; so finding kind comments such as this one, on them is amazing. Thank you.
...excellent 'train' anthology of poetry - or train poetry - but you are definitely heading down the right track with your writing - and I would blow the steam whistle for you anyday - so come on board all of you lucky passengers/hubbers and I am your conductor Colin saying this is a person who writes FULL SPEED AHEAD!!!!
Thank you Colin - some days my writing is full steam ahead and others it feels like it is in the lost luggage department. Now there is a thought I think I have remembered a photo that will go on this poetry page. Thank you for your kind comment.
"Aware of how vunerable she is, how frail love is".
I wondered about the "how frail love is" part of it but I think i understand now
Thanks for a simple yet, deeply felt poem
Your poems on the train were delightful reading it drew me into a carefree reverie wishing i could just pack a bag and get on a train and go somewhere on a adventure it was amusing and good reading these poems thankyou, yet wong
Hi thirdmillenium thank you for reading this and for the feedback too. I see what you mean and I considered the word fragile instead of frail, as it describes my intent for the word more accurately. However when I read the poem as 'out loud' the flow of the words is easier with the shorter word. Hope that explains it.I will think about this in future and see how I can improve it. Thank you I am happy to read ideas like this one as it is constructive.
very deep, and interesting. Did you know anything you write has automatic copyright? even if it's a letter to a friend or a post-it note.
Hi Davorunner thanks for reading and leaving a comment here. I read somewhere about the copyright you mention. Explanation, at times I do go through the pages I have written adding copyright notices, sometimes this is after I have discovered a photo or piece of text of mine used without my consent.I hope that by putting the copyright note on my pages it acts as a 'reminder' to those who might not know or abide by the 'rules'. :)
p.s. I never put a copyright notice on my post-it notes. :)
thank you for such an exallent poem
Beautiful poetry, thanks for sharing. Voted awesome and up.
Thank you Becky, for voting for my poems pleased you enjoyed this page.
Thank you! The first one brought about thoughts of Richard Lewis Springthorpe.(a.k.a Rick Springfield)
2uesday, lovely poetry! The last two especially hit home for me. I've lived amazingly similar events. Keep up the good work!
Thank you Poetic Fool for a lovely comment on this.
how nice is poetry in motion
2uesday I enjoyed your poems I guess I should have said. Are you in England ? I saw it said UK.I think that covers quite a lot, doesn't it ? It does seem kind of strange to be able to write that far away. Nice though Thanks for being following me . clara
Hello Clara I am pleased that you enjoyed this page of poems. Yes the UK covers England,Scotland,Wales and Northern Ireland, yes I am English.
It does seem strange that we live in a world now where we can communicate so easily. Especially when you think about the past when a letter had to be posted and took weeks to arrive and books were the main source of information. I think some of the changes are for the good, but not all of them. Thank you for your visit to my page and sending best wishes to you for your writing here.
This is my favorite of your poems so far, I hope to read many more.
Thank you JaxonVast its good to know that the poems are being read and that you liked them.
That last one sounds all too familiar. Lovely words.
Thank you Georgia, well it was based on waiting at cold railway stations in the past, luckily eventually the trains do arrive.
creativeone59 Level 4 Commenter 23 months ago
Thank you for a beautiful and awesome poem although kind of sad. Thank you for sharing it. Godspeed. creativeone59